Before we get into today’s poem, I need to repeat the news, in case you missed it: the incredibly talented Fred Koehler has signed on to illustrate my debut picture book, Flashlight Night (Boyd’s Mills Press), which is due out in Fall 2017!
This is a “first” of sorts for both of us – and if you read my post from this past Tuesday, you can find out why!
Now then…onto today’s poetry! Laura Shovan’s February poetry prompt series, the “Found Poem Project,” is in full swing (I hosted the project last Friday!), and today I have another poem to share that was inspired by one of her ‘found’ objects.
I don’t normally share poems that haven’t had time to sit and marinate for a while and be revised – this poem only took me about 45 minutes to conceive, write, and edit slightly – but I thought posting a rough draft of a poem for a change might not be a bad thing:
The Old Woman in the Yard
We’d walked this way for years.
Each time, we’d see her there
in burlap dress and bonnet,
hands clenched, as if in prayer.
Her back was always turned,
head bowed in silent thought;
we wondered (rather, worried)
should we bother her, or not?
So every time we passed,
we never said a word,
we never slowed our pace;
the woman never stirred.
And then one day we came upon
an empty, hollow space…
we’d never known her name.
We never saw her face.
– © 2016, Matt Forrest Esenwine, all rights reserved
If you’d like to see the photo of the unusual object that spurred me to write this, along with all the other poems that Laura’s readers have contributed, please visit her blog today! And for all of today’s Poetry Friday links, head on over to Kimberly Moran’s blog, Written Reflections.
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I love this poem, Matt. It’s tender and touching. It made me think about my father who always greeted those he passed on the street, whether he knew them or not. It’s a good example to follow. Once there is an “empty space,” it’s too late to make that human connection. Keep up the good work. . . .wishing you all the best with your picturebook! Leslie
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Thank you, Leslie! I hope to see you at our next critique group meeting!
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Just noticed an error in my first comment. Please delete it (smile). Leslie
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Got it!
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What a very poignant poem – so many untold stories there. Congratulations on your picture book, Matt!
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Thank you so much, Myra!
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Congratulations on the upcoming book! I love your poem–a reminder to acknowledge the humanity in front of us.
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Thank you, Jane, I’m glad you liked it.
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So exciting about your coming picture book, Matt. I love what you did with my picture/doll, captured a feeling I think others of us have sometimes, that we “missed the opportunity” that should have been taken. You may want to work on it more, but I hope you keep that wistful sympathy in it.
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Thanks, Linda. I would like to flesh it out a little bit, but I have a few other projects I need to work on, so who knows when I’ll get to it…but at least the main idea is down on paper!
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Huge congrats on the book, Matt. I’m sure it will be grand! I like your 45-minute poem. What might we find if we could explore every opportunity in our path?
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Thank you, Karen, I appreciate it! And you’re right – I think as writers, we need to be aware of every opportunity in our path, even if we are unable to take each one!
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I loved this story. I read it through three times and each time gave me more.
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I’m so glad you enjoyed it, Kimberly, thank you!
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I. Adore. This. Thank you, Matt.
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Thank you, Amy! That means a lot.
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This is such a haunting poem. I love the way you made her into a real person, instead of writing about a doll. We had great responses to this one.
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Thanks, Laura. I usually try to find a different angle from what everyone else does…sometimes it works, sometimes not! Glad you liked this one.
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First, Congrats on the good news for your book!
Second – wow. That is a powerful poem for one written off the cuff. Like Laura, I appreciated your different take on that found object.
Have a great weekend!
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Thank you, and thank you! Hope you have a nice weekend, too, Robyn.
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Many congratulations on your upcoming picture book, Matt. That is wonderful! I am fascinated that you called the poem you wrote a draft when it feels so right. 45 minutes – you should be very happy with the outcome of this word weaving.
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Thank so much, Carol. I only call it a draft because I haven’t called it done…yet!
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Poignant indeed, and old-fashioned in a lovely way. Congratulations on all your exciting new developments, Matt! Your carefully-conceived 97-point plan for success as a children’s poet is coming to fruition, just as you deserve. ; )
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Well, I figured a 100-point plan would have been just way to intimidating. And so far, so good! Thanks, Heidi…and have a great weekend!
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Obviously, it’s okay to trust yourself on some 45 minute drafts. Sometimes they just come out whole. Like this one. I like Heidi’s word — poignant.
Congrats on all the great news!
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Thank you, Mary Lee! Glad you liked it.
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That’s pretty darn good for 45 minutes, Matt! And congratulations on your upcoming book! It’s great you have an illustrator you’re happy with.
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Thank you, Iza! Yes, Fred is great – and seems as excited about the book as I am, which is nice!
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This poem is haunting, Matt. And beautiful! Congratulations on your book! And good luck with the other eight or nine!
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Thanks, Carol – I just sent out 4 cover letters this past week, so hopefully I’ll learn something in a couple months!
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Gawd, Matt, I hope the old woman didn’t freeze to death! I’m nearly frozen myself and I’m in the house! Keep warm and congratulations on all your good news!
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Ha, thank you, Diane…and stay warm!
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Your news is so exciting, Matt. What a wonderful book baby you have to look forward to!
Re: your poem, I agree with others— I’m impressed at how this haunting little poem came to you in 45 minutes (gotta love when that happens). It will stay with me for much longer.
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It is nice when the words flow like that, isn’t it, Michelle? Thanks…and best wishes with what you decide to do with your blog!
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Congratulations on your good news, Matt! And I really like your doll poem–it struck me when I first read it on Laura’s site. So mysterious. You leave each reader to determine her fate for themselves. Nice!
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Thanks, Violet, I appreciate that!
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