This post was originally published Aug. 9, 2012 and was the first children’s poem I ever shared here. I was going to do this last week, in honor of my 401st post, but I decided to share some major news instead! So this week, I’m reaching into the time capsule and re-sharing this; not just because it was one of my first blog posts, but because it was also one of my very first children’s poems I ever wrote. Hope you like it!
(By the way, Mary Lee is hosting Poetry Friday today – so be sure to visit her at A Year of Reading, as well!
Last Friday, I kicked off my participation in Poetry Friday with an Elizabethan sonnet I wrote for my wife as part of my wedding vows. She has been so helpful and supportive to me in my quest for publication in the world of children’s literature, I felt it was the perfect poem to get things rolling.
Today (our anniversary, ironically), I’m spotlighting a poem I wrote for two other people to whom I owe the deepest gratitude for not only supporting me, but constantly inspiring me: my two daughters. Interestingly, it was actually written long before I even knew I wanted to be published in the world of children’s literature.
Now, it may be comprised of only two stanzas, but this poem was a long time coming. I originally wrote it in the spring of 1999 while watching the girls (ages 7 and 4 at the time) playing at Taylor Park in St. Albans, Vermont. Taylor Park is the quintessential New England town square, full of lush green grass, tall maple trees, and a big water fountain. It so happened that, on this day, as I watched my daughters running around being kids, the first stanza just came to me.
I had already had a few adult poems published independently at this point, so writing poetry was nothing foreign to me; writing children’s poetry, though, was unfamiliar. Not knowing what to do with these two little couplets, I wrote them down when I got home and read it to the girls and their mom. They liked it, but I felt like I was giving Lauren, my eldest, the spotlight and leaving poor Katie out of it. I wasn’t sure how to include her, but I kept thinking about it, figuring something would eventually hit me.
It did.
A little over a year later, we were at the park again and I was mulling lines and phrases over in my head…when it dawned on me that even though Katie was playing with her older sister nicely, she was playing differently and seemed to have a different frame of mind. That was all it took to figure out the angle I needed and bang out the second stanza.
But because no poem is ever good enough, I went back to it a couple years ago and tweaked a couple words here and there. That’s what writers are supposed to do, right? Revise, revise, revise??
Well, I think it’s pretty well set now. I hope you like it! And if you ever find yourself in northwestern Vermont, take a drive through downtown St. Albans…and maybe you’ll find inspiration, too!
Downtown at Taylor Park
Lovely Lauren, little daughter,
fishing in the fountain water,
looking for a leafy fin –
leaned too far and tumbled in.
Katie-Bea was fishing, too,
doing what her sister do.
Closed her eyes and made a wish…
don’t know how, but caught a fish!
– © 1999 Matt Forrest Esenwine, all rights reserved
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That’s lovely, Matt! I really enjoyed your story about the genesis of this poem. I’ve had that happen too–part of a poem comes to me, I know it’s unfinished, but the next stanza is years in coming.
This has the light-hearted yet proverb feel of a nursery rhyme/Aesop fable. I can just see it in a book, each stanza with its own page and illustration.
Wishing you all the best as you work on achieving your publishing dreams!
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Matt, somehow in two short stanzas you managed to capture two distinct personalities. It’s a fine poem! Thanks for sharing it.
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I love the fact that Lauren is grounded in reality but is still playing like a child, yet I’m playing make believe, where i can do or be anything, even catch a real fish, not just a leaf! I’ve always loved this poem!
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What is it with kids and fountains? I had to fish my 4 year old out of a green and slimy fountain, too.
Thank you for sharing your wonderful poem!
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I love the two very different surprises. They give a sense of the two different personalities and the relationship of older and younger sisters. As an older sister, it felt familiar.
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Awww – lovely feel to this one and funny too! I find it very difficult to write poems that include my children… and oh yes to revise, revise, revise! Taylor Park sound like an inpiring place to be!
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Adorable! I’ve been watching my boys in their “separate” play and noting how each interacts with his surroundings, so I can totally see the scene you create in this poem, and the two distinct personalities of your daughters. Plus it has the lilt of a nursery rhyme – two stanzas chock full of goodness! 🙂
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Love hearing how this poem grew!
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I really like the jump-rope-chant feel to these. Glad you worked out a way to not play favorites:>) My favorite line is “Looking for a leafy fin –”
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Thank you all for your comments, I appreciate them!
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This poem is one of the many reasons I knew you were the one for me 5 years ago!!
Just love it!
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Thanks, Honey! Love you.
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Happy Blogiversary, and thanks for sharing this peek at your beginnings as a children’s poet!
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Thank you, Mary Lee!
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It is wonderful, Matt, and while it’s so personal to you, I think it could be widely applied to any two children, often so different in their approach to life. I love hearing the story too. Sometimes a poem is so important it stays with us, doesn’t it? Happy Blogiversary! And Happy Weekend, too!
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Thank you so much, Linda. Have a great weekend, as well!
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I loved hearing the story behind the words – behind every successful writer is often a team of dedicated supporters, every step of the way. 🙂
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Thank you for being one of those supporters, Jane – I appreciate it!
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First one?? It’s very polished, Matt! Sounds like you had top-notch muses.
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Thanks, Tabatha! Those two girls were the reasons I started writing children’s poetry, and their two younger siblings are the reasons I’ve become published.
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What a great poem you created, Matt, and just think it only took years for it to evolve into what you wanted it to be. The first stanza shows a child serious in nature trying to capture a catch. The second child spontaneously catches one upon a wish. Is that how your girls are in real life? When my grandbaby finally comes, I want to create poems for her. I have a draft video poem that I created for PF today. Of course, I am reminded by your remarks that it takes revision to create what I would like to say in a better format.
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Thank you so much, Carol! Yes, the two girls are very different. They are both creative types, but Lauren, the elder, is a very logical, cerebral, no-nonsense kind of girl while younger sister Katie is much more of a free spirit.
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Lovely! Both girls sound delightful with their differences.
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Thank you, Kay! They are.
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Sweet and delightful. I don’t remember reading this poem before. Enjoyed all the backstory too!
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Thanks so much, Jama!
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So fun and playful, Matt. Thank you for sharing it with us!
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Glad you liked it, Christie, thank you!
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Cute! Am sure this poem will get lots of retellings through family generations.
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Thanks, Kat. Both girls know it by heart!
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So sweet! Ruth, thereisnosuchthingasagodforsakentown.blogspot.com
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Thank you, Ruth!
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By the way, I can’t find the sonnet! Where is it?
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Sorry, here it is…I re-post it every year on our anniversary, so I think I messed up the chronology of the posts! https://mattforrest.wordpress.com/2016/08/09/poetry-friday-constancy/
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I like that you’ve shared your process and set the scene. Makes reading the little ditty so much richer. I like knowing that your daughters are honored there.
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Thanks so much, Brenda. If you ever happen to make it up to St. Albans, you’ll see the entire park and fountain (in the photo above) directly across from all the businesses in downtown.
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I’ll add it to my list. I love everywhere I’ve been in Vermont. It’s a beautiful place.
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So great to keep poems not only for your literary journey, but as treasures for your kids, too. & Congrats on all the LIGHT shining on your book already! :0)
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Thanks, Robyn, I appreciate it!
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A lovely little ditty of a poem Matt, thanks! Your rhythm in the poem reminds me a bit of “Peter Peter Pumpkin Eater.”
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Oh, you’re right – I never noticed that! Thanks, Michelle.
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