Yes, I realize we’re in the middle of summer. Temps here are between 80-90 everyday, and I’m loving it! So how about we cool off a little, with a poem I wrote way back in April and then promptly forgot about…
Quite a different poem from my prose poem about flowers (that wasn’t really about flowers) that I shared last week! Cheritas aren’t typically titled, so if you’d like to learn more about the form which, simply put, tells a story in 1, 2, and 3 lines, feel free to view past posts like THIS or THIS.
A few more shots of Tory Brook, which runs behind our house:
And now, a quick note about process: if you are not a writer or poet, you may not be aware of the extraordinary lengths through which we go to make sure the right words are in the right places. To that point, while the poem didn’t take me more than an hour and a half to write, nearly one-third of that time was spent struggling with whether to place the word “gravity” after “crafted by” – and conclude the poem with “time” – or to swap those words and have it end as it is here.
Why this mental debate? Because although I really liked the alliteration of “mossy/maps” and wanted to include some internal rhyme with the assonance of “crafted/gravity,” the fact is that “gravity” was arguably a much stronger word on which to end the poem. So I wrestled with this for quite some time…and ultimately decided that the stronger word needed to the concluding word – but is close enough to “crafted by” to still gain the benefit of a little internal rhyme.
You had no idea how important words are, did you? The struggle is real, folks.
Margaret Simon is hosting today’s Poetry Friday roundup at her blog, Reflections on the Teche, where she is asking the wide-open question, “What is poetry?” So head on over and check out all the links and fun!
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15 thoughts on “Poetry Friday: “Tory Brook Cherita””
Matt, I think you got the order perfectly, “crafted by time/and gravity” (after all that struggle – BELIEVE me, I know, and I am never fully sure of my own…). What a beautiful setting, Tory Brook. Beckoning, indeed. I also appreciate the return to a poem “promptly forgotten about” – it’s like finding a partly-buried treasure and getting to restore and polish it ’til it shines with new luster. As your cherita does.
-Fran Haley, https://litbitsandpieces.com/
Thank you, Fran! When I sat down to figure out what to share, I knew I wanted something completely different from last week’s prose poem – which I’m still not comfortable calling a “poem” – and when this popped up in my files, I had to spend some time searching my blog to make sure I hadn’t shared it yet! I think what happened was that I wrote it to share here, but then National Poetry Month took off and it sort of got lost in the shuffle. Glad I waited!
The struggle IS real. I wonder why on earth I spend so much time fussing over word order and syllable counts. Seriously, poetry isn’t my day job. But, I do love making the poem just right…which you have. Stepping into a cool brook is exactly the image we all need right now. What a special place so close to you. Is the brook literally named after Rev. War tories? Kinda neat, if it is.
Thanks so much, Linda! I’m not sure from where the word “tory” comes in reference to this brook (also known as Willow Brook), although it is one of several streams that feeds into a large wetland known as Tory Hill Meadow, which then continues on as Willow Brook. I’ll need to talk to the Historical Society sometime about that!
The process is the thing. I can spend an inordinate amount of time on one word. And perhaps that’s why we are poets. The grappling of the word, its meaning, its sounds, and even its appearance on the page engages and challenges us. Your place is peaceful and inviting while your poem inspires.
Thank you so much, Margaret – I knew you’d understand and appreciate the struggle! 😉
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I love the peek into your process, Matt. And I think ending with “gravity” was the right choice. (I’ve never tried a cherita…)
Thanks, Laura! I like cheritas, as I think they are a fun and useful way of distilling a story down into its most important aspects. So it’s a wonderful tool for writing poetry!
“A mossy map” — sweet! I loved playing in streams as a kid and loved watching my kids as they did the same.
Thanks, Laura…growing up in the woods, this sort of imagery is quite familiar to me. (And people wonder where I got the idea for ‘Flashlight Night’…ha!)
Thanks for the peek into your process and a refreshing visit to your brook. I think ending with gravity was perfect though I do understand your dilemma. So often I want to add footnotes to poems explaining word choice or placement. lol On another note, I have to say I don’t trust you quite as much now that I know you enjoy 80/90 degree temps. Ick!
Ha, I do love the hot weather! Thanks, Molly.
Yes, I love the thinking behind your poem and the fact that it reminds me of my 3-yr-old granddaughter’s hiking days. She loves following the trail and looking for animals. I captured this one for my Embraceable Summer Gallery collection, Matt. Thanks.
Glad you liked it, thank you, Carol! (although you may want to hold off until springtime, since it’s not really a summer poem….but it’s up to you!)
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