There was a time when I used to wait for inspiration to strike. Then I decided I needed to challenge myself to become a professional writer of poetry and create my own inspiration. (Or, at the very least, seize upon any and every opportunity to be inspired)
Case in point: Last week, writer and blogger Michelle H. Barnes featured writer/poet/editor/blogger/chocolatier Renee LaTulippe sharing one of her lyrical language lab’s lessons: sentence transformation via mood, effect, and emotion. In this series of posts, Renee encourages prose writers (and poets, as well) to improve their writing using poetic devices and techniques.
In her post, Renee used a sentence about a steam train as an example, and showed how to progressively develop the sentence into something more than “just” a sentence. As I read her suggestions and sentences – and thought about each of the photos she shared – the following four lines came to me. It’s another short poem like the one I shared last Friday, but between electrical wiring issues, a blown boiler, and a father who is in the hospital, life is still pretty nuts around here; fortunately for me, four lines was all the poem requested. Hope you like it…and be sure to visit Becky Shillington’s blog for today’s Poetry Friday Roundup!
Steam Train
Firebox flares,
steam shoots high;
smoky billows
shake the sky.
– © 2014, Matt Forrest Esenwine
I completely understand the need to create our own inspiration as poets, Matt–if I just sat around and waited for inspiration to strike, I don’t think I’d ever get anything written, simply for lack of discipline. I’m a huge fan of shorter poems because they so often zoom in on their subjects with sharp focus. This one is amazing! Thanks so much for sharing! I hope your father is doing better.
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Thank you, Becky! I appreciate that.
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I admire that about you, Matt– that your muse is always at the ready. Love this 4 liner just as much as last week’s.
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Thanks, Michelle – keep ’em comin’! (and I’m still hoping to find the time to write my monster haiku!)
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Your 4 lines pack a wallop. Nice job, Matt. =)
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Glad you liked it, Bridget, thanks!
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Succinct–that’s just the way I like a poem. Plus, you got it to rhyme!
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Well, you are the haiku queen, so if anyone knows about being succinct, it’s you! Thanks, Diane.
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Well done. I like how that second line is longer – shoots away from the others!
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Thanks, Robyn! I hadn’t noticed that, although I had originally included the word “as” at the beginning of the 3rd line – but then edited it out to make the poem stronger. Glad I did!
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Nice! Great sounds and verbs. I really like the minimal use of articles. I agree–it packs a punch.
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Thank you, Liz!
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